The Official Writing Challenge
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04/12/07
This is an interesting and original story. I would've liked to see more dialogue in it, instead of it being mostly telling.
04/12/07
Usually, I avoid the time-travel "you are there" takes on familiar Bible stories, but this one is different and I really like it.

I also love your narrator. He is such a genuine human being. Perhaps that is what makes this story-teller's perspective different. I do enjoy your style of writing!
04/14/07
A very unique take here that I enjoyed reading. I would edit the beginning a bit and get right to the action, but still, very nicely done!
I really enjoyed this story--a very original take and written excellently.
Very interesting! I like this kind of 'biblical' time-travel. Nice mystery!