The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a pretty creative story. It did keep me reading until the end. I would encourage you to work some of your telling into showing. For example, some of Mr. Hakeem's instructions could be written as dialogue and the interaction between Hannah and the popular girls as well - which you did with Sophie. Also, some line spacing will make for a more enjoyable read. Good job, overall. Keep writing!
03/07/24
Thank you, Vince Martella. I wanted to include the dialogue, but I had to stick to the word limit. Thank you for the encouragement.
03/14/24
I really enjoyed your story. I could feel the emotions of Miss Louis. Maybe because that is the place where Jesus found me, among the least of these.
Keep writing!

Naoma Bird