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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: FAITHFULNESS (10/07/21)
In order to celebrate our friend's birthday we decided to have dinner at the Golden Coral. When we arrived there that evening we were met by a smiling waitress who guided us to our table, brought the beverages we ordered, and directed us to the various refreshment counters of the buffet. The meal was delicious and we enjoyed the food and the fellowship. But most of all it was the attitude of the waitress that impressed me.

An aura of cheerfulness surrounded her and her smile was infectious. When the old lady at the corner table, spilt the coffee all over, she spoke kindly to her as she cleaned the mess and brought her a fresh cup of coffee. She whispered something to the little boy who was playing with his food, that made him look up and smile at her. In short she was scattering sunshine wherever she went. I could see that she loved her job, and poured her heart into doing it well. A work well done with enthusiasm and devotion makes the heart experience the joy of the Lord.

That evening at the Golden Coral has left an indelible memory in my heart. Although her job was not an easy one that waitress had found incredible happiness in doing it. I wondered if this was not the reward God offers those who ' run with patience the the race that is set before them (Hebrews 12:1)?' That kind of patience would demand unconditional faithfulness and devotion. And isn't faithfulness the fruit that matures on the tree of gratitude? I believe that only those who can comprehend this truth can enjoy the ' joy of the Lord.'

And when God looks down from heaven, and sees me doing my job, to the best of my ability, with faithfulness and joy, I am sure it would put a smile on His face.





(True Story)
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Terry R A Eissfeldt 
10/15/21
I really like the ideas and situations you share in this article.

Here's my favourite line:
And isn't faithfulness the fruit that matures on the tree of gratitude? I believe that only those who can comprehend this truth can enjoy the ' joy of the Lord.'

A bit of red ink: I wonder how different the opening scene would be if you described the scene at the restaurant and include all the senses - showing instead of telling that part.

Blessings
Arlene Baker
10/15/21
I agree with the above comment. This story has a great deal of potential, however it is all telling and no showing. Put dialog in it. Pull the reader in through emotion. What was the writer's emotion when the coffee spilt? Develop your theme. This waitress deserves the honor you have extended!
Sue Botte 
10/17/21
I have often said: “No one so blind as a waiter/waitress who is not engaging in what they do.”

My praise to the waitress in your entry.
I deduced from her dedication to serving and encouraging people it is perhaps her calling.

Although I agree with the comments above, the message was clear.

It will be more memorable with description of the waitress, the restaurant and dialogue.

Thank you for this entry. Blessings and Keep Writing.
Philippa Geaney
10/19/21
This is a lovely story and reads smoothly. Thank you for being an observer of such faithfulness.
Please forgive me if ever I ‘borrow’ your phrase of ‘faithfulness the fruit growing from the tree of gratitude’. Love it!