The Official Writing Challenge
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07/29/16
Wow. So powerful and concise. I was struck by each and every one of your "I'm afraid . . ." statements. Throughout this piece, you said so much without telling, and with so few words.

My only two cents is a tweak at the end: "Jesus is calling us to put our trust in him. And while I don’t believe that he always chooses to remove us from our problem, I do believe we can trust him to be there with us."

To match the strength, conviction, and power of the rest of the piece, avoid phrases like "I don't believe' and "I do believe." Be bold. Trust your convictions. And say it like it is. You can even keep it as simple as: "No matter our circumstances, Jesus calls us to put our trust in him."

Very enjoyable read.
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