The Official Writing Challenge
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The ending was a happy one! All through this terrific piece I wanted to holler "sing in English, God hears His praise,"
09/15/13
Hallelujah! I was so happy with the ending of this intriquing and well written story.

God Bless~
This is really lovely. I think you did a wonderful job of showing the frustration of the MC. I could relate, not because of the foreign language, but because health problems can cause the same frustration in me. It might be a Tad weak on topic, though you used the word at the end, it was hard to see the topic throughout the piece. That is one of the harder things to perfect. Your message and your ability to connect with the reader are your strong suits. Nice job.