The Official Writing Challenge
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09/17/09
It does sound a little like complaining but your writing was very good.
09/17/09
LOL! I enjoyed this. It made me smile. Good job.
"seal choking on a kazoo" is nice hyperbole but awkwardly delivered. "Don't get the idea I'm feeling sorry for myself. (Actually I am)" is nice gently honesty but why the full stop (period) before the brackets? A bit cliche in parts, but good humour in the delivery and highly enjoyable read overall.
09/19/09
I hear the top of the totem pole is very gusty. Lots of hot air. Loved your humor and faith in The Father.
09/21/09
I enjoyed your story. It is wonderful that your life is filled with the love of your family.