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02/22/07
Good descriptions of trying to get in shape. I esp. liked stanza 4. Good job.
I loved this...my favorites: dreadmill, fat begone...Great descriptive poem with lots of humor. I liked your physical fitness tied in with spiritual fitness. A winner in my book.
02/23/07
I really like the last stanza and its explaination of the title. Great job.
02/23/07
I got a kick out of the first 4 stanzas being "fatter" than the last ones. Cute poem!
Very nice poem!
02/23/07
Good job - great rhythm, great images. I really like the last line about running the race and its Biblical tie-ins.
Excluding the title, I see two complete poems here. You put them together nicely, but each could stand alone with a title of its own. Good job.
Great poem! I loved the way you put it together!
Enjoyed this. I like the subtle references in the first four stanzas to our Christian walk.