The Official Writing Challenge
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10/19/06
Touching. Wonderful writing, loved the dialogue. Realistic too. Only one suggestion: spacing between the paragraphs makes it easier for online readers. Thanks for sharing. Keep up the good work.
10/20/06
The emotions from both of your characters are very real, and the dialog quite realistic. I hesitated a bit at the end--as a person intimately familiar with spinal cord injuries, I doubt that a person so completely paralyzed that he needs a respirator would have enough movement in his hands even to gently squeeze. Unless you intended it as a miracle, because he had chosen to forgive? That concern aside, it was a touching and moving story.
10/23/06
A truly touching article. The emotion the cop showed was convincing, moving from toughness to a feeling of remorse and the dialogue put the past action into perspective. You did a good job with this.
10/27/06
Great story. Very realistic with a wonderful ending. Well done!