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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: River (08/31/06)
River of Life

Once upon a time there was a mommy who really loved her little boy. She held him tight to her and rocked him in her arms. She knew in order to keep him safe she had to put him in a basket and put him by the river. She didn’t want to do it and it tore her heart wide open knowing she may never see him again.

God was watching over the little boy and his mommy. That same day a princess was walking along the river and she found the little boy in the basket. She looked all around and couldn’t find the mommy. She picked up the little boy and knew that he needed a home. So she adopted him.

She couldn’t take care of him the way mommy’s of new born babies do. Just then a young woman came by and asked if she could take the little boy to a woman who could take care of him for her until he was older.

The princess told her that she wanted her to take him to someone who could take care of him for a while.

The young woman took the little boy to his real mommy to take care of him. She had faith that God would take care of her son and he did. He brought him right back to her to care for.

That little boy grew up and went to live with the princess. He became a mighty man. Even though he wasn’t with his real mommy, his mommy knew that he was safe and would become a great man of God.

No matter what the young man did, God was with him; even when he did some really bad things. The man had a hard time growing up when he knew that he wasn’t like the princess and her family. He was different from them.

One day God called to him and told him he would lead His people. The boy, now a man couldn’t believe it. He had killed men, he couldn’t speak well, and yet God wanted him to lead people.

God gave to the man all the skills he would need. The man did miraculous things that no other man could do. Only with God’s help could he do these things.

So the little boy who was by the river grew up to be a man who did many things with water. God used his water beginnings to be life for His family.
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Fenny West
09/07/06
A very good thoughtful rendition of the life of Moses.

well done!
Valerie Routhieaux
09/08/06
This is a good children's story. Though you should have mentioned the little boy's name. It would have been more powerful. Though we know it's Moses, children won't.
Kaylee Blake 
09/09/06
Loved how it tied in with the challenge topic. But, personally, I think it was watered down, even for a children's story. Kids are smarter than we give them credit for and I think they can handle more information.
Phyllis Inniss 
09/09/06
I like the way you presented the story in a way that children could be enchanted with it. A young age group would love it. Thanks for sharing.
Brenda Craig
09/12/06
I can just see a mommy telling her little boy the story.

And in response to using the name of Moses, I might put it at the end and say to the children, "Do you know who the little boy in the story is?" Kinda like a bible story with a mystery needing an answer. Just my humble opinion. A lot of childern's Bible stories are this way.

I found it delightful and could visualize the little children listening attentively trying to figure it out. Great job!