The Official Writing Challenge
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04/28/06
I thought your topic choice was good and use of good scriptures although at one point it seemed like too many and maybe you could have added more of your own words with them. Also, there were some verb subject agreement problems here and there.( I always miss some myself!) With a little work, this will be even better!!:)
04/30/06
The recurring metaphor of the storm is effectively used. Some tightening and editing will "shine" this gem.