The Official Writing Challenge
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Nice flow. Caution: Your ending loses a lot if your reader doesn't know who/what HAL is, otherwise, they're going to say "huh?". I enjoyed it.
I'm one of those who do not know who or what Hal is...

It was an interesting story however and it kept me reading to find out what was going on and what Miss Lisa was doing. Good job!
I was fascinated with all this new technology that is far beyond me. I just wanted to know what the problem was and how you were going to solve it. I hope that Hal's replacement of Lisa is a good thing. Good job.
I thought it was excellent writing except at the end, was "tireless" the right word? I'm not sure if you meant since "Hal" it was a breeze or it took five months to get rid of Miss Lisa.