The Official Writing Challenge
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01/14/22
Thanks for this encouraging devotional
01/16/22
Loved your entry and your devotion to the LORD.
Thanks for sharing.
Blessings~
Beautiful!
I enjoyed this devotional. You did a great job of showing a real-life experience that many can relate to. Be careful of switching your tenses. You started in past, went to present, and back to past. That's something many struggle with, but the more you write the easier it becomes. Your message was clear and you nailed the topic.
01/21/22
What a fabulous out of the box approach to the topic. From the beginning sentence there was a clearly well-defined theme that you developed and brought to a beautiful conclusion. As noted,
be careful to keep the same tense within a paragraph.

Ex...and pick up. Also, in your first paragraph, you could have eliminated all the "had" words.

This was indeed a beautiful food for thought devotional and well worthy of
"Highly Recommended."




01/21/22
You could have eliminated all but the first had..."Yesterday
had been busy." :-)
04/24/22
This was beautiful, Shanta. Just the other day, my husband and I were talking about how God has embedded in His Word, every answer to, or instruction for, our situations.

Since your private note to me a couple of weeks ago, I have been gradually working my way through reading all your submissions. Though I see your struggle with English, I actually can say it is not as bad as you think. Your English is quite good for it being a second language.

However, what I see the most is your heart of love and joy. It shines from the ceiling, walls and floor of every piece you write. I do believe you love the Lord with all your heart and mind and strength. And that you love others as yourself.

Keep writing, please. I look forward to reading everything you write.