The Official Writing Challenge
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08/06/21
That was a hard lesson to learn.
You did a nice job with the descriptions. You pulled me in. I've passed out a lot so can relate about being confused. Since it was based on a true story, I think it would have been great to write in the first person.
08/11/21
I agree with Shann. Since it's based on your own experience, writing it from your point of view, could have added another dimension of flavor.