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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: CONFUSED (07/29/21)
What is love when I person is mistreated by their spouse or any other family member. For example my daughter does not want to be around me because I dressed like a clown. I wore a pink top with matching athetotic pants.

My husband is always on my case where I should comb my hair because I look awful when in fact I comb my hair twice a day like once in the morning, and when I get out of work. My daughter and my husband make me feel ugly about myself. They look at me as an embarrassment. It make s me feel suicidal.

Nobody else ever makes feel like a nobody not even my son. My husband feels like I smother him when I am around him. I not always around him. He has a gambling problem. I should not have to take it. My husband always asks me if I take my medication, and I do. He is not medication, too, I take medication for depression.

I know that God did not put on earth to be verbally abused like that. I have been bullied too much by other people. My parents always told me how take things too seriously. Well that was pretty serious was punched in the head or back.

I just pray that my husband and daughter could accept me for who I am, and not what I wear. My daughter usually screams at me for being dumb.
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Laura Manley
08/06/21
Your entry breaks my heart. Since it is written in the first-person, may I assume it is a true account of your life. If so, I would suggest you get help. If you want a review on your entry, I would first advise you to proof your entry prior to submitting it. There are several words that are deleted and/or the wrong word where another should be used. I don't know who you are, but I will pray for you and your circumstances.
Graham Keet 
08/08/21
It seems as though the problem is shared between the people you mention.Keep praying about your circumstances.
Remember that Jesus would have died for you even if you were the only person in the world. He loves you that much.
If you are considering further writing, apply the comments already given above - they will be very helpful.
Bea Edwards 
08/09/21
Yes I agree with Laura's assessment. If this is a true account please seek help.
You are being abused.

I also agree with proof reading your entry prior to submitting it.

Reading it aloud to yourself may help catch mistakes.

May Jesus's love for you guide you in moving forward past these hurtful circumstances. Praying for wisdom.

Good words from Graham.
Arlene Baker
08/12/21
This article has a ton of potential. Obviously, from the previous comments, it pulled on readers' emotions - which is always the goal of good writing. However, it is confusing (!). Perhaps that was your objective for the "Confused" Challenge. I would suggest you take one or two of your examples and flesh them out more thoroughly. SHOW the emotion. SHOW the hurt. Don't simply tell the reader. With those tweaks, your article will completely blow the reader away!