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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: SHOP (01/03/19)
When I visit the library which I often do, I try to find books which would inspire me. For example, I look for a book about "Faith" or "Brokeness." I also borrow books from our church library. I like to read fiction or biographies.

I borrowed books from public libraries which are about romance, deceitfulness. I have experience deceit from a friend which I knew for a long time. So when I read those books, I felt that I was not alone who felt that brokenness.

When I feel like I need something nice for my wardrobe, once in a while I buy a pair of jeans or a top. I also like to look at stuff in stores, and then if I like it, then I would get it later when I get paid.

I like to look good for when I go to church, so I bought some dress pants and a dress top. Now I feel that I do have a lot of clothes. I know that God does not look at the way we dress as much as He looks at our hearts.

I will continue to read books, and not focus on buying stuff that I really do not need.
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Barbara Culler 
01/10/19
I'm an avid reader, and enjoy Christian suspense and romance books. So easy to get lost in them. Yes, I agree that books are better than more and more clothes! I would have liked to read a very eye-catching opening in your article. Why is shopping less important than reading is for you?
Corinne Smelker 
01/10/19
This article/story is perhaps a little too literal and does not 'show' but rather 'tells'. Your final point was solid but the way you got to it was really straightforward. I recommend you read some of the Masters entries to get an idea of what kinds of entries make an impact.

Also, it is 'brokenness" with two 'n's'.
Corinne Smelker 
01/10/19
This article/story is perhaps a little too literal and does not 'show' but rather 'tells'. Your final point was solid but the way you got to it was really straightforward. I recommend you read some of the Masters entries to get an idea of what kinds of entries make an impact.

Also, it is 'brokenness" with two 'n's'.
Linda Lawrence 
01/10/19
I’m guessing this is a brave attempt to follow a nudging to write this year. Congratulations on making the leap.
I think you are TRYING to convey that God encourages you to look/shop for help in spiritual growth more than to shop for ways to look good on the outside. A worthwhile conviction, but this piece needs help in segueing between the two practices.
For example, if you ended the second paragraph and began the third paragraph with something like this:
So when I read those books, I felt better, that I was not alone. (Next paragraph). Often when I want to feel better, I look for something nice for my wardrobe. . .
Hope this helps encourage you to keep looking for ways to improve your ability to convey what God is teaching you.
C D Swanson 
01/10/19
Wonderful expression of your inner self, thanks for sharing with us.

Faithwriters is such a blessed place as you're among friends and those who enjoy sharing the Word...and may you continue to pursue this in avid fashion.

I enjoyed reading your entry.

God bless~
Claudia Barrington
01/11/19
I love your wisdom and grace.
Bonnie Bowden 
01/13/19
I am so glad you have decided to join FaithWriters.

I can sense a story in here (Currently, it is more of a narrative). I think dialogue would add more interest right away. The use of strong verbs would also help. For Example:

The dog was happy.

Snoopy jumped on my lap and kissed me on the lips.



Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
01/16/19
I really liked the idea of shopping in a library. I think it's original and out of the box. When I first started entering the challenges, I received some great advice: As soon as you see the topic, write down the first five things you think of, then rip it up and throw it away because it's probably the same five things others think of. Sometimes I get too far out of the box, but I think the idea of library shopping was brilliant. I'd have loved to read even more about it, maybe even something to make me chuckle. Try to paint a picture for your reader. You're off to a great start with an original idea. Don't get discouraged, and keep writing. I'm excited to see what you might think of next.