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Topic: BUSY (02/02/17)
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By Dorothy MOFFITT
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with no time left to play,
no time to spend with God or friend.
When will thus feverish rush end?
Martha's are too busy
with their housework goad,
to listen to Jesus,
their problems to unload.
Too busy to listen
too selfish to obey,
looking out for self
all the livelong day.
Listen to Jesus
trust and obey,
then we can be willing
to follow in Jesus way.
We can be too busy
doing our own thing,
not willing to see
there is a better thing.
Busy for Jesus,
busy as can be,
but he wants us
just to be.
B e still and know
that I am God,
that I made you
from earth's clod.
To be busy is not a disgrace
if our priorities are in place.
Spend time with Jesus,
then our day will go like a race.
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I suspected there would be quite a few Marthas and Marys in this week's topic. Jan from Jan's Writing Basics gave me great advice 7 years ago. She said to write down the first 5 ideas you thought of when you heard the topic, and then throw them away because it's likely many others thought of same idea. If you feel God nudging you to do such a story, think of ways to make it different. One way might be to tell it from the perspective of the neighbor girl or if you want to be daring from the POV of the mop and broom (or Mary's mop and Martha's broom).
I did notice in your poem, you switched voices from third person to first person. Be careful to stay consistent. If meant to be Jesus speaking, put it in quotation marks.
You make some great points. I think we can all relate to being too busy in this world in which we live. When Jesus had this lesson, he knew you would use it as an example and that your words would touch everyone who reads it. Nice job.