The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a fun approach to the topic. Your dialog starts out very convincingly, but as the story moves forward, I was less convinced that children would talk the way they did. I guess it depends on the age you are trying to depict.
I'm with Naomi, children in my experience do not talk this way. But the facts you presented are fascinating: maybe you could have presented this as an expository essay, with your trivia facts about spring. I learned a lot from this.