The Official Writing Challenge
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11/17/11
This was cute and clever. I liked the last line..."He needs a spaminator!"

God Bless~
11/19/11
A very creative and unique way of looking at the topic. I like that your MCs both had high standards, and were willing to pray for their wanna-be suitor rather than either give in, or give up on him. Well done.
I really enjoyed this story. It started with more telling then showing.Example: It is fall, and there is a chill in the air. tells me but if you said Samantha scrunched the dry leaves under her feet. She shivered as the wind tousled her hair. that would show me like you did later on.

But once you started painting a picture and developing your characters you really drew me in. You covered the topic in a clever, funny way. Your message is great and with some more showing in the beginning, you'd have a delightful pre-teen story.
11/29/11
Interesting, . . . girl talk.
12/01/11
Congratulations on your HR placing. Nicely done.
God Bless you~