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By Amanda Brogan
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Thank You Lord, for this time that You have given me to serve You. You've shown me that there are many young people out there who share my heart for Your work and You've given me many good friends. I know by their presence that there must be a man somewhere that You are preparing to be my match - someone who will love You with all his heart and will love me enough to lay down his life for mine.
Suddenly my thoughts were interrupted by the shrieking growl of an animal. It sounded like a mountain lion. I jumped to my feet and looked around me in every direction. I wanted to run for shelter in the woods on the edge of the valley, but I wasn't sure where the sound had come from. The cougar could very well be lurking in the trees, waiting for me to make a move, or it could be hidden behind a cleft of rock on the mountain. Either way, out in the open was not a safe place to be. I set out slowly walking in the direction of home. My house was miles from here but I couldn't stay in the valley with the threat of mountain lions nearby. I kept walking, planning to make a mad dash for home once I got to the edge of the valley.
I snapped my attention to a grouping of trees. Movement. Before I could look more closely the cougar leapt out of its hiding place and began running straight for me. Panic seized my heart and I frantically started fleeing from my pursuer. I knew all hope was gone as it drew closer with each spread of its muscular legs. All I could do was pray.
Fear made my long dress difficult to run in, and I abruptly found myself falling to the ground as I tripped on its hem. The cougar rushed forward, and I shielded my head with my arms. Then seemingly out of nowhere a young man stepped in front of me. I watched in mingled awe and terror as the cougar lunged towards us, mere feet away, and the man expertly threw a knife into its fury chest. It landed with a growl of agony about four feet away as my protector nearly landed on top of me to shield me from the beast. When he was sure it wasn't moving, he got up and helped me to my feet.
"Well," he said, "these are strange circumstances, but nice to meet you." He flashed a charming grin that perfectly matched his bright, gentle eyes.
"Wow. Yo-you could have been killed saving me from that mountain lion. How'd you even find me here?"
"Your father sent me to find you. He invited me to eat dinner with your family tonight. He said I'd probably find you out here, but I didn't expect to find you being attacked by a mountain lion."
"You could have died." I repeated. "I don't know how to thank you."
"What kind of man would I be if I had let you die?"
As he stood like the tall, protecting mountain behind him, I knew that whatever kind of man that would be it wasn't him. He had laid down his life for mine.
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Good job.
I do hope you will write a sequel...just have to see what happens between these two. ;) Good story!
The first paragraph alluded to a previous experience, and so it lost me for a bit. After a paragraph or so, the narrative really seemed to get back on track.
Well done.
Interesting how you took it from a time of reflection and praise to a sudden life and death situation.
Good job!