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Awesome! I didn't realize that the woman was blind, so when that was revealed, it came off wonderfully. Plus, it makes sense for a blind person to behave as she did. Great story!
Mr. Cooper was the one that was blind, right? Nice little story.
A blind man and his trust in God saved her. What a wonderful story and right on topic. Good job of writing!
Nice surprise ending! I think it would also work well if it turned out that Jenna was blind. A few re-words here and there would do it (just a thought, anyway - to give you a different type of challenge :-)). I'll be honest and say I felt there was just a tad too much "telling" and not enough "showing," particularly in the beginning. But it came together nicely and your point was well made. All in all, a great entry for "calm."
This is a very nice, with a good ending.

There are a few punctuation issues, as well as tense changes, that need to be tightened up. Would be easy enough to fix with additional proofing.

I like the way you stressed the "routine". Good message.
Enjoyed this story. Makes you think!
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