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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Music (03/08/07)
Heartphones

The mid-morning sun illumes the clouds
And bids me out for a jog
Sweatshirt, sneakers, headphones loud
I plod out into the fog

My breath rushes out before my eyes
Heart and feet are in perfect beat
This music makes my soul to rise
As body and spirit meet

The terrain begins a slight incline
My efforts increase steadily
Praise music fills my ears and mind
But my focus remains on me

I dwell upon my tightening chest
And focus on weakening limbs
A certain song does my attention arrest
And my thoughts return to Him

Distracted from myself,
I fully praise His name
My heart can think of nothing else,
But the message that Christ proclaims

He claims attention away from me
Lest I should cause myself more pain
And draws me near to set me free
From self-made fleshly chains

The more I focus on the Lord
When life’s terrain becomes severe,
The more strength and comfort He affords
His heartsong fills my ears
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Joanne Sher 
03/15/07
Your title drew me in, and your message kept me! The rhythm felt like a jog. I enjoyed this!
Phyllis Inniss 
03/19/07
Wonderful message here. I like the way your discomfort on your jog shifted from yourself when you heard the Word of God. Interesting poem.
julie wood
03/19/07
I really enjoyed this poem! Good message and beautifully vivid imagery. My favorite line: "My breath rushes out before my eyes."

The line "Distracted from myself" is shorter than the rest--it could use a couple more words to fit the meter.

Great descriptions here--I really liked "plod," "tightening chest," and "weakening limbs." I could both see and feel with the jogger!
Jeanette Oestermyer
03/20/07
What a lovely poem. I write a lot of poetry, and I can tell when the poet speaks straight from the heart. I love how you show how God helped you to keep going even though the way was rough. Well done, and keep writing. God Bless
Marilyn Schnepp 
03/20/07
Not "headphones", but "heartphones"; nifty! Very descriptive and has a great message for the Christian struggling uphill and onward. Loved it!
Myrna Noyes
03/20/07
Clever title and excellent message in this well-written poem! I liked how it shows God ministering in the everyday routines of our lives! Thank you for sharing! :)