The Official Writing Challenge
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11/17/06
This was VERY deep and thought-provoking! Wow. I noticed some grammar and punctuation errors, but this definitely kept my interest from beginning to end
11/20/06
Powerful writing. I, too, noticed a few grammatical errors that needed fixing. Also, you need to make smaller paragraphs so that they are more reader friendly. You'll scare readers away from a story with a great takeaway. Very creative, very moving.
11/22/06
Needs some editing for paragraphing, spelling and grammar; but keep practicing and never give up! God bless.