The Official Writing Challenge
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10/19/06
To me this piece was a little confusing and disjointed. It was rather choppy. Great potential, but it needs a little work.
10/20/06
Some nice images here--the "disturbed sparrow", the buildings up one side of the street and down the other. Can a whole town really be Christian? Perhaps a bit unrealistic, but I enjoyed the gentle mood of this piece.
10/22/06
An interesting story and an interesting concept of justice. I wish there was a town like this!
10/23/06
I like this article and the way you handled it. The cop at the start thinking things couldn't be too difficult, then realizing why the former cop felt 'pressured' to leave, knew that he too would be in for a rough time. He would have to be a Christian in the true sense of the word, to enjoy his job.