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01/16/05
This is a very lovely allegory of our Heavenly Father's open arms...but in the world of your illustration, where the Father sits in an armchair, it strikes me that 11 is very young to have run away and not to have returned. Perhaps you could just say "at a tender age." You beautifully captured our Father's love...thanks so much.
01/23/06
I think you did a lovely job with descriptions on this piece.

There are a few concerns for you to look at.

POV doesn't allow you to tell about the man relaxing, as you can only see the back of the chair and the top of his head. You can only speak of him sitting. Relaxing indicates insights and feelings, which we aren't privy to.

The other thing I might change is the "welcome my child" thing. It's a bit overdone. "I've been waiting for you" "welcome home" would be ok here.

Thanks for sharing this piece.