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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: CHILDHOOD (03/09/17)
Timmy peered through his thick black-rimmed glasses to see the dark and dusty old room. A musty smell seeped through his nostrils as his pulled his skinny torso into the square opening into another dimension of time and place. The skinny eleven year old son of Janene and Frank Jenkins knew that his parents had told him that the attic was off limits. This was the day Timmy would cure once and for all, his unsettling curiosity.



The opening portal was of all places, though the top of Timmy’s closet. It had mesmerized little Timmy’s imagination for many years. What could possibly be in up in the upper part of the one story house? Many nights lying in his bed wide awake; he dreamed of all sorts of delightful treasures that awaited him. His parents had gone shopping and allowed Timmy to stay home alone to study for a test.



As he came to his senses he found only one box, which contained old high school annuals. He turned around to see the rest of the high beamed structure. He saw a sparkle of sunlight towards the rear corner of the attic. His eyes widened and a smile lit up his entire face. He focused on numerous packages and of all things, toys!



For the first time Timmy squeaked, “I knew Santa left my presents here in the attic. Dad and mom put them out on Christmas morning!”



With pure excitement, He walked steadily toward the presents. All of the sudden, the floor gave way as Timmy crashed into the living room floor! He looked up to see a noticeable gaping hole in the ceiling.



All of a sudden his vivid imagination was terribly jolted into reality, “What have I done?”



“What am I going to tell mom and dad?” squalled Timmy.



He had a thought, he would go into his room and pretend that He had been in there the whole time.



About that time he heard the back door open. He ran to his room, and attempted to look “Busy.” All was quiet in the Jenkins home for several minutes, and then Timmy heard a knock on his bedroom door.



Frank stuck his head in the doorway as He firmly asked, “Timmy can you come into the living room?”



What was Timmy’s punishment on the first day of his fleeting independence? A stern tongue lashing, then he was sent to his room to study under his mom’s strict supervision.



What is the moral, you might ask? When I was a child, I thought and reasoned as a child but when I became an adult, I put away childish things like crashing through living room ceilings. Everyone remembers childhood memories some good and some not so good. We experiment and test boundaries and find things are not always the way they should be. We learn through those simple things strength and character to make it in this life. It’s good to look back and laugh at some of our childhood antics and adventures.
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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
03/17/17
You have a delightful sense of humor. If you expand on it, it could be even more interesting. Let the reader know right off that it is Christmas Eve. Don't be afraid to use dialog, thoughts and body language to do more showing and less telling,This has worlds of possibilities. If you'd like to tweak it a bit and then send it to me, I'd be delighted to give you more feedback (remind me I said this). You have some great talent and God has great plans for you. Great job.
Agatha Mangwende 
03/17/17
I enjoyed reading this article, easy to read, humorous and one cannot miss the life lesson at the bottom page.
Larry Whittington
03/18/17
A very well written tail that I am glad it was shared. Time can erase embarrassments. I could see something coming but didn't know what.

Nice writing.
Phillip Cimei
03/18/17
Wonderful story. Well written and right on topic. You had a good hook and beginning. Great job. There were several little errors, like capitalization, when to beak dialogue to another sentence, some minor grammar issues. You certainly won't stay in this level long. Great job. God less.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
03/25/17
Congratulations. Happy Dance! What a comeback!