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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: LUST (all-consuming desire; excessive craving) (01/08/15)
My folks chase five Cs religiously
Cash, Car and Country Club frantically
Condos and Concubines zealously
A successful but hollow person tragically


Three Fs that can make you frail
Have you heard of this wise warning
Fortune, Fame, and Fe(male)
I remember it as a youngling


The love of money becomes obsession
Our human warmth evaporates
In the end we become the possession
People and money soon separates


Insatiable desires for fame unwittingly grip
When you reach your goal
You'll find it hard to let it slip
It's become more valuable than your soul


Living a sensual life with males or females
Trying to be a Delilah or Don Juan
Sowing wild oats; ignoring moral ills
Having no attachments, they pursue sexual fun


Lust of the eyes, lust of the flesh
the pride of life; He'll keep us from stumbling
On Christ, let's keep our focus fresh
Blameless, He'll present us in His appearing


Soon the world is fading away
Dearly, onto Your will we hold
Surly the lust of it won't stay
Never allow our heart to grow cold
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Sheldon Bass 
01/15/15
Thank you for your entry here. You have a good sense of what is important to write about. And, I can see your abilities shining through. I'm not so good when it comes to forms of poetry, so I'll speak only to subject content.

This piece touches on several aspects of the problem. And it alludes to the answer found in Christ. Yet, I can't help but to want more detail of two things: The real cause of the problem (rather than just stating the problem) and a clear explanation of the cure. This has wonderful potential and I pray you will keep on growing along with the rest of us. Blessings!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
01/15/15
This is a great poem that definitely nails the topic. As humans we do lust over many things. The only answer is found in Christ, which you definitely point out in this lovely poem.
C D Swanson 
01/15/15
Beautiful poem with an important message...well done!

God bless~
Danielle King 
01/18/15
You have delivered a worthy and on topic message in your lovely poem. Hope to read more of your work in the weeks to come.
Noel Mitaxa 
01/18/15
Clear truth shines through this poem, but my style of poetry offers you no tips for any improvement you seek. So if you want to sharpen your skill, I'd suggest you check out the members' forums.