The Official Writing Challenge
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11/21/05
Very descriptive. You have some run-on sentences that need fixing, but you did a great job of helping us to understand what winter without snow is like! (Almost made me LIKE snow...)
11/22/05
Not being a Californian, I enjoyed the Weather Agenda you gave - then everything was still interesting until the very end. I wanted a big, beautiful gut wrenching or hanky type ending that would bring me to tears. The ending! That's all that was wrong...otherwise a well written, witty story of a land I've never seen. Nice!