The Official Writing Challenge
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10/17/05
This story is so true...I had to laugh about stepping on a toy( know that experience well) yet you showed in a mighty way what we can do with our thoughts of life.. I loved your story.
10/19/05
This was a great story! Very good dialogue. What I would suggest is you break it up into smaller paragraphs and separate the dialogue. You had a few misused words (your) and some punctuation errors but the story itself was very good!!:)