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09/13/05
I have felt the same about some of my childhood friends. It's just such a romantic notion of ending up with a good friend that you love so much. But, if God is leading your life you should have no regrets about where it is now. Because Jesus has the perfect plan for all of us. Anyway, strikes a chord with me - could be a little more poetic but I hope I see that enduring trust of Jesus shining out in your next piece. God bless.
09/13/05
This needs editing for sentence fragments, punctuation, spelling, etc. But it is heartfelt and written in an authentic voice, showing lots of promise.
09/15/05
high school is two words. I couldn't really get a grasp on this story, perhaps it was rather a little too vague for my taste. I kept thinking he was going to kill himself, but then he betrayed you. How did he do that? A little more detail would have been nice, but that's just me.