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Topic: Ohhh…. (02/04/10)
We are all familiar with the adage: “Anything that can go wrong, will!” Unfortunately sayings don’t offer much consolation when we have to struggle with the reality of what did go wrong and the ensuing results.
Part of my job requires that I respond to the customers of a wholesale distributor – the calm, patient ones as well as the frustrated ones who demand that they “must have it yesterday.”
It was, in fact, yesterday when I received one of the “must have it yesterday” calls. Our customer called to let us know that the order she placed was delivered. “Ohhh…good,” we collectively declared.
However, we were soon informed that the thirty-five cases did not contain the citrus-colored paper she ordered; thirty-five cases of cerise-colored paper were delivered instead. “Ohhh...no....,” we collectively muttered.
“What are you going to do…..this has got to be re-delivered tomorrow at the latest….I think I’m going to have a heart attack over this one,” the customer shouted all in one breath. “Ohhh…dear,” we collectively consoled.
This “Ohhh…” has a happy ending. Our supplier was able to accommodate our customer. They corrected their order-entry error and re-shipped the green paper. They even issued a pick up order for the pink paper. “Ohhh… what a relief it is,” we collectively rejoiced.
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Delores McCarter
02/11/10
Cute story. You may want to go easy on using the key word so many times in your writing. Other than that, nicely done.
Amanda Brogan
02/11/10
This made me smile. I think God allows difficult characters in our lives to help us to grow and build patience. Like the "must have it yesterday" people. ;)

I could see everyone saying "ohhh good," "ohhh no," "ohhh dear!" :) It was kinda short, but still a cute story.
Avigail David
02/13/10
I liked the good principles conveyed here. You've expressed them in one short writing. Indeed, we reap what we sow. If we follow after peace with all 'men', and do good to all, as the Bible says, we are following the law of Love our Lord Jesus commands us. And let us not grow weary in well-doing, in due season we shall reap.

Thank you for you writing. Keep it up.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
02/15/10
Add a scripture and you could easily convert this into a devotion-most need word counts under 300 words. You make some goood points, I'm sure there is a perfect Bible reading that would tie right in. Good job.
Jan Ackerson
02/16/10
Definitely nice to read of a company that does its best to serve the customers!

A quick note--ellipses are always just three dots, and are never followed with a comma.

I enjoyed your casual, relatable tone. A pleasant read.
Mark Bell
02/16/10
great story. i work in customer service, too. you sound like you talk to my cloients (lol). nicely tied to the theme. not sure the title goes well with it given the ending,though.
Verna Mull
09/08/10
I enjoyed this, as we always joke about my living under "Murphy's Law." Sounds just like a day in my life. One little suggestion. You might put an extra space between paragraphs. This makes articles easier to read.