The Official Writing Challenge
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You made me feel this woman's pain. Great descriptions. Good job!
06/01/09
You described the horrible effects of depression very well.

It'll make your piece easier on the eyes if you put spaces between all your paragraphs. I'd have liked names for this woman and her family, not just pronouns--admitedly, that's just my personal preference.

Love the hope at the end!
You did an excellent job of describing the woman's depression. I really understood what she was going through. This is a very good start! Way to go!
An excellent beginner's story. It could use a little editing, but as far as content, you have incredible descriptive ability and insight. Well done!
06/04/09
Very emotional and I connected with the descriptions very well. Some space between the paragraphs always helps the eyes but other than editing this is a fantastic first entry! Welcome to the group :)
06/04/09
It was easy to feel this woman's pain and the problems her depression caused. You showed her situation well. Very well done for your first piece!
06/04/09
This is incredible for your first try. Well done! You did a great job of capturing what depression looks like. You didn't say she was depressed, you SHOWED us most vividly that she was depressed. Ah, the power of God through His written word...it's alive and powerful and full of hope.