The Official Writing Challenge
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04/11/09
Good job, creative approach, and I like the whole thing being in 2nd person.

By the same token, though, perhaps too many sentences began with 'you'. Some introductory phrases or rearrangement of words might provide a bit more variety.

Very well done.
I loved the little guy crossing "the finish line with the bottle". Motherhood can sometimes feel like a fast race and you captured that so well. Thank you.
04/25/09
Hi Laura. I'm a week late, but wanted to leave a quick note to let you know your entry, "Welcome to Motherhood," actually did very well in the Up and Down Challenge. Although you didn't receive an award, you made it into the Highest Rankings for Level 1, placing 6th in that Level (so just one off an award). There were a lot of entries this week, and competition in Level 1 is always very intense, so well done.

If you'd like to check the highest rankings for yourself, you can find them here:
http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewtopic.php?t=25204

The highest rankings are posted every Thursday evening on the Message Boards.

Again, well done. Hope to see you at the FaithWriters' Conference in August. With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)