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Very nice devotional! I think I would've found it a bit easier to read with shorter paragraphs and sentences. Keep writing!!!
08/28/08
I enjoyed this piece--one distinction that could've been brought out. Disney employees are actors who play a role as you said but Christians become the role. Anyone who is in Christ is a new creation. Overall, though it was well written. Keep up the good work.
08/28/08
Nice corollary. The title pulls the reader in and the segue to the Christian life is great.

I find the last paragraph about Mike a bit out of place. It seems an abrupt change of focus. Although a nice tribute to a friend, I feel it detracts from the impact of the piece. I think it would be a stronger devotional by dropping that paragraph -- tell Mike in person what you think of him! :-) Or show him the piece and tell him you think he lives it out.
I agree with Lois...the last paragraph was not needed.


Awesome entry and a good comparison.

Great work.

May God bless.
Sincerely,
Dan Blankenship

08/29/08
I really liked this analogy. You have some good advice above - won't repeat it. Creative.