The Official Writing Challenge
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02/29/08
This is a great story, lots of tension. With tighter writing, the story would really pack a bang!
02/29/08
Ouch—an unfortunate reality—but you hit the theme dead on. Nice work.
The story needs some editing, but great idea here and wonderful ending!
03/04/08
I've seen the effects of this kind of betrayal and it's devastating for all in involved. Fits the topic to a T, and certainly makes a strong point!
You did very good job leaving the reader in suspense, and your ending was a shocker. The sad reality is that many wonderful ministers fall into that trap nowadays. We need to pray for our spiritual leaders. Thank you for sharing.