The Official Writing Challenge
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I like your conclusion. It fits the title well and offers a very different perspective on the benefits of Sunday school.
11/03/07
This would make a good story for a 2nd grade Sunday School class.

Your first sentence should be a real "grabber"--and yours has her as a "small little girl." Can you describe her with more interesting adjectives with different meanings? Maybe as a "shy, freckled girl" or a "curly-haired, laughing girl"? Something to consider in future stories...

I like the affectionate family relationship described here.
The mean spirited little boy should read this, he would see God prevails:) Loved this story: a fathers love, a teachers devotion the whole kit and kaboodle! Great writing.