The Official Writing Challenge
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Your story is heart-rending, and kept me interested throughout. Leaving spaces between your paragraphs would be helpful to the reader. I would have liked for the ending to include more than simply an anticipation of better things to come (a bit of the message, or some scripture, or a warm, personal interaction with believers), but that's probably just me. Keep up the good work!
11/03/07
I loved it when you wrote about the butterfly comparing it to Stella. Nice job!
Laury
11/03/07
I liked the fact that you had her "moment of truth" take place alone, in a room with so much spiritual meaning for her. I was expecting a different ending, and I was glad to see a bit of a twist.
Truly heart wretching story. Well written, well said and certainly inspiring to those in the same situation. Great writing!