The Official Writing Challenge
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09/16/07
What a sweet story--I recommend that you give it to your Sunday School teachers for story time.

A few things to work on: you capitalized several words unnecessarily (Police, Hospital, School come to mind), and you should put quotation marks around words that people speak.

It won't take much to fix this timeless story up. Very nice.
What a cool story. We often find it's the little blessings in life that get so easily overlooked.
It's a joy to see young people set self aside. I enjoyed this sweet story.