The Official Writing Challenge
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08/24/06
Wow! Powerful story. I like it.

The only suggestion I would have for it is to make clear who is talking earlier. I somehow thought it was the hostages talking among themselves at first.

Again, lovely!

08/27/06
Great story but I agree the dialogue is hard to follow at first. Great descriptions though; I felt like I was there in the room! Keep writing!