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WOW - I especially love the final couplet. I really enjoyed this - excellent images!
I think this is a powerful and insightful piece - I could feel the wind! I hope to read more of your work very soon. Thanks for your e-mail to me too Belinda! Hope you put in your biography too.
You did a wonderful job of describing the sacrifice the Lord made for us. Welcome to FaithWriters and keep writing !
WOW, what a powerful poem. It really tore at my heart to meditate on all that Jesus has done for us. A great job of rhyming. That is my favorite kind of poetry. To me, it stirs my heart more than the modern prose-poetry. Great job. Let's have some more!
Hello Belinda. WOW! What a powerfully moving poem.

I cannot wait to read more from you.

On a technical note:

The commas tend to take away from the moment of pause at each concluding thought. I would remove the commas and place periods at the end of a thought. I believe it gives a lot more power to your words.

Just my two little cents. Blessings to you! I am so glad Marijo led me to this poem.