The Official Writing Challenge
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I love this entry!! You tackled "Great" from a different perspective. I really enjoyed the conversation with the old man and the importance of being a great servant. Keep writing. I enjoyed this very much.
I liked the story and the fact that you remembered the conversation - must have had a great impact on you.
Sounds just like a parable Jesus would tell. GREAT job! You get a very important point across in a wonderful way! BRAVO.
What a neat story - you really drew me in and kept me there from beginning to end! And what a message. Your ending is quite powerful.
Well written!! Great dialogue! You might want to space it up better as I found it abit difficult to read without the spacing. But was rewarded by your good story. One note, typo on 'any tricks' should be any. Keep at it - you are good!!
A wonderful way to express the truth that the greatest is the one who is servant of all. Nicely done.
I'm delighted to find a story about the "Greatest Show on Earth" in the "great" category. Sadly, the circus is gone, but not the stories that can be told. And, your well-told story leaves us with a good message as well. Good job!
Great job! Well written!
Great life lesson. Nicely told.
This is wonderful, especially for a first challenge entry! Very atmospheric and subtle, with a message but not preachified. Feel free to e-mail or PM me, and I'll walk you through the formatting problems (spacing). This is an outstanding story.
Thank you all for your comments. Several of you mentions spacing problems. When I wrote it it was indented. I cut and pasted it and that's how it ended up. I'll do better next time, sorry.
Hi Phillip-
Don't let the formatting problems get you down. They are easily corrected. Your story was wonderful and that's what counts! :-)
I like this. Clear pictures of what you were trying to convey. I could see the old man talking to the boy, and see the surprise on his face when he told the boy his position. You did a wonderful job. Keep writing
Double CONGRATULATIONS! Winning on your first entry is mighty impressive. Welcome to Faithwriters, too, your new "home away from home." We're glad to have you on board.