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04/13/06
You must be so proud of your son. Your wonderful story drew me in. You could combine the first two sentences
04/13/06
You must be so proud of your son. Your wonderful story drew me in. You might consider combining the first two sentences
04/14/06
This is a good message and one which parents can only hope for - the will of God being seen in their own child. Some sentence fragments and misuse of words (ie churches should be church's), etc. I love this line: "when they do the work of God it’s like a bubble fills your chest and joy so unspeakable burst forth inside you."
04/17/06
A lovely tribute. Please separate your paragraphs. I almost didn't read it without the white space. I'm glad I did though, very nice. Filled me with hope for that "someday" with my own children.
04/17/06
Sweet story, but would have made a much more powerful impact on the Reader had you separated the paragraphs...making each paragraph and sentence a "knock out punch" so to speak. A proud mother I am sure! And understandably so.
After reading this, one can surely understand your fulfillment as a mother and with God as he has worked in amazing ways in your family. Thanks for hsaring this heart-lifting story!
***oops***typing too fast...I meant 'sharing'
04/19/06
Very touching and real!

Please don't be dismayed when some of us oldies yell,"More white space please." :0)
At one time or another each of us realized what a big difference that makes in the reading and understanding of a piece.
Blessings~lg