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Our time on this side of eternity is limited and it is important how we use it. With a little work this could be a very nice devotional. You might consider changing the first line..."Your favorite movie just got over..." to "Your favorite movie just ended..." Also, to give the piece a little more depth, consider adding something about God knowing the number of our days. Just a thought. Good job. Keep writing.
"Your favorite movie just ended"...yes, I agree, much better! However, it is short, sweet and to the point; a nice devotional. PS: Need some quotes around the words of the song. Well done.