The Official Writing Challenge
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COMMENT: Intriguing and creative story. CRITIQUE: A few comma's missing, Creator should be capitalized (in my opinion), and the ending left this Reader hanging. As for the subject "space"...I assume the purchase of a "star" means space.

All in all I was intrigued, fascinated and anticipating a sensational ending; Instead I was disappointed - I wanted a WOW! A real Punch! BUt I liked your idea very much!