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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: CALENDAR (10/20/16)
A hand slipped out of the hand of the One who knows all things
One who walked in ways none understood, none comprehended and many rejected
This hand was slipped into the hand of another, a traitor disguised as a guide
And the impression of the power to know and do all things was birth forth
Men made plans without checking in with the All Knowing
Timelines are drawn, deadlines set and schedules clearly scribbled out
A destination targeted and the path laid out
A journey set out in darkness, into the unknown
With few spots of lights beaming from lamps here and there
Lights generated from temporary sources, lights fading away
Yet many are clamoring for these lamps to make their path clearer
Many miss out on timelines due to dimmed lights or walking the wrong path
Others by making the wrong turns or making the wrong choices
Many are stuck halfway for the lack of light, or out of sheer depression
Deadlines never met and schedules miscalculated
Many have lost their path for they headed the wrong direction
Or simply because the One who knows all things is still in charge and working things out to HIS pleasure
Working in HIS timing, per HIS schedules, these completely different many others
Intercepting the timelines and goals of many
However, others have reached their destination, met the deadlines, pulled through to their destination.
Quite satisfied to look up on the wall impressed with the ticks against the dates and marks against the goals
But its only a matter of time before their heads bowed and unexpected remorse fills their hearts, for they arrived at the wrong destination
Others have placed their hands in that of the One who knows all things
One who has plans beyond their imagination, goals which are an escalation of their dreams all positioned at different appointed times
Yet have made up their own plans, specified their goals per their own times
Slipping their hands out of that of the All Knowing on numerous occasions to make sure everything falls into place
For the frustration of seeing dreams chattered, goals unachieved, deadlines passed and plans fallen apart is simply unbearable
Others seem to have gone ahead, taking centre stage while they lag
Positions have been closed before them, dreams seem to slip by while they are passed right on to fellow dreamers
All things seem to be falling out of place, wondering when they will get to the top, when their prayers will be heard and answers received
While the One who knows all things watches on
Leading them on paths they don’t want to go on
Intersecting their paths and making life frustrating
Opening doors they wish were shut before them
Their worst fears seem to been realised and all hope lost
Why not go along with others, slip out their hands and go after the lamps others seem to chase after
It seems to serve better than having their hands in the hands of another
Doing their very best to ignore the caution of the danger ahead if they took out their hands
The One in whose hands they have placed their hands is better than any lamp
It is safer to walk in darkness, with their hands locked in HIS for HE is light
HE is the grand weaver
HIS ways are not their ways and HIS timing not their timing
HIS calendar different from theirs
HE has all things ready to get them what they need and to where HE needs them to be in HIS appointed time.
Before they were born, HE made a Calendar for them with the dates and achievements during these times specifically written out.
And could not wait to walk hand in hand with them on the path so intricately laid out
Shielding, strengthening and comforting them through the hard times till the day when their tears were due to the amazement of what the Grand weaver has accomplished
It is ok to let go of your calendar and walk by HIS
Winning is only possible when HE leads
Let all hands be slipped back into HIS hands and feet closely behind HIS
Calendars ripped off walls and eyes focused on HIM who knows all things
HE has you where HE wants you to be and will get you where HE needs you to be according to HIS calendar
Let today be the day that you slip your hand back or hold on tight.
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Chris Goglin
10/28/16
Thank you for your submission. I see where you are going with this, but it needs several breaks with paragraphs to understand. Perhaps starting with "Before they were born, HE made a Calendar for them with the dates and achievements during these times specifically written out..." then following up with the beginning of your material. Keep writing! God Bless!
Jan Ackerson
10/28/16
There is some very strong imagery here.

It's difficult to follow, however. I'm unclear whether you intended this as a free verse poem or as prose; in either case, it's somewhat lacking in focus and flow.

I'd recommend that you present this as poetry, but with less density of words, to give your readers a visual break.

The concept of using HIS calendar is a creative one.
Larry Whittington
10/31/16
Your descriptive verse describes both individuals and congregations or churches. Many have taken their hands out of THE HAND THAT CAN. There is no safety here but they do not see it. The parable of the sower indicates the different kinds of soil or hearts. Those planted in the good soil keep their hand in THE HAND THAT CAN AND WILL. The others are lost.

I like your style of describing the different ways we might be walking.
Lea Austin
10/31/16
Your poem seems to call to those who have forsaken God’s way to travel their own path, and your concern for them shines through.
Sometimes, especially with poetry, pages with lots of words and little white space seems crowded and can overwhelm the reader. Breaking a long poem into stanzas gives the eye some white space to rest and makes a long poem more inviting.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
10/31/16
You make some excellent points. We are all trudging through the years, yet we do have a purpose. I felt a bit bogged down with this. It felt like you were saying the same thing over and over and I think you could have cut this to a third, made your point and it would have been more powerful. I do like your message. I believe you have a passion to help others find the truth.