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04/14/16
I like your descriptive language and the concept of the article. The emotions you created felt real and the MC was credible.

Thanks for sharing.
04/14/16
I liked the reflective thoughts of the main character. My favorite line was: The walls were like crumpled, yellowing pages from a discarded comic book.
04/15/16
emotional, sad story - you made it real to me. I like happy endings, and you gave it to me.
04/15/16
This was an excellent story, you did a fabulous job with the topic in content, delivery and outcome. Loved it!

Blessings~
Yes, waiting patiently for God's timing and God's plans keep many people from a happy busy life.

Good thoughts in your writing. We should all look at how we are handling the time God gives to us.
04/17/16
Your opening drew me into the story. Your descriptions and feelings made me feel your pain and withdrawal from society as looking through a mirror.

Well written
I'm not great at noticing titles, but this one was perfect. In her vanity mirror, she discovered she had no self-confidence anymore. I like the irony. It was quite clever. My heart ached for the MC, yet in many ways you could have been writing about me. I liked the ending too. Many would have been tempted to send her to church to hear the message that changes her life, but in her state, going to church just isn't possible so the Holy Spirit came to her. It's a beautiful example of how much God loves us.
04/21/16
Congratulations, Kristen, on winning the Beginners category and moving to the Intermediate level.

Your story was emotionally charged and well written. I look forward to reading more of your work.
04/21/16
Congrats!


Blessings~
Congratulations on ranking 1st in your level and 18 overall. The highest rankings can be found on the message boards.
05/10/16
You did a great job of describing a hopeless life of self striving and how one touch from our loving Father can change it all.