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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Trees (12/05/05)
I realize today that I must stand for something, or I'll fall for anything. I have just turn 13 and it's that there comes more responiblity for me.

Now I have to keep my younger sisters and brothers more because they say that I'm very mature for my age. Do anyone really know maturity or it just something say?

My friends and I have decide to celebrate my birthday at her house. My parent are really okay with everything. They only wanted to know if her parents were going to be there and her mother was. You see how easy it is to please parents. They really don't ask you any details; I guess they think that all parents are the same.

I arrive at my friend house at 6:00 and my Mom didn't even get out the car. She kissed me and told me to have a good time.

When I got into my friend's house, her mother was already drunk. Of course, I knew that she drank quite a bit; come to think of it I don't remember her ever being not drunk.

My friends, they all had their drinks in their hands, and pass me one. I know how easy for me to go with the crowd and drink. It wouldn't be my fault because my mother should have check things out. She didn't do her job as a responible parent because she doesn't even know this lady.

I told that I didn't want anything to drink. They all started to talk about me that I was still a baby. I went to the phone and call my mother to come and get me. She was quite puzzle by me wanting to come back home but she came and got me anyway.

I am a 13 year old christian and I had to stand how for my christian values. I had to be that tree planted by the water and I was not to be moved on this issue. I thank God for me to be strong in this situation. I will continue to minister to other youth because it we all stand as strong trees, we become a forest.
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Shane Kahkola
12/12/05
You do have good potential as a writer. I would caution you on a couple things:

1.) You M U S T proof-read your work! It is so important that you check your spelling and grammar before submitting.

2.) Be careful about being quick to judge people in articles. There is good truth in this article. Your parents probably trust you because of your behavior. Rather than reward their trust with casting them down, try accepting that your convictions have brought your parents to that trust.

You really need to stay involved on the message boards and have a good time here. There are a lot of people who can help you with your writing.

Keep it up.
Grace Sempa
12/12/05
It is a good thing you did standing for what you believe in,sit and talk with your mum please ,concerning the issues you wrote about.
Garnet Miller 
12/12/05
You have a good start here with your article. When polished, I could see it in a youth Sunday school book as a lesson.

Do be careful with the message you send. Youth are very impressionable. The parents in the story knew they could trust their child. Also, if the thirteen year old knew that the mother of their friend drank, then they could have been responsible enough on their own, to not go over there in the first place.
Karen Heslink
12/13/05
I love your ending about all standing together to make a forest. You have great potential as a writer. I agree with the others, I think you need to talk with your mom. You will get lots of support here at FW, but you and your mom need to be able to talk about the things that are important to you. Give it a try. We'll all be praying for you.
Birdie Courtright
12/13/05
Good job! Good choice to stand apart from the peer pressure. I know that's tough. Sharing the courage that it took to stand apart from the crowd, may help another young person do the same. Jesus will become a great adventure, keep writing as you experience more and more of it!
Jan Ackerson
12/13/05
Thanks for sharing this! Consider removing yourself from this kind of temptation by seeking out like-minded friends.

You will be a very good writer some day; keep at it!
Gini Branch
12/13/05
Good stuff! Keep up the work. the others have given you some excellent critiques on the writing. Liked the inclusion of the decision making process, especially moving beyond blaming Mom.
Nina Phillips
12/17/05
You have a beautiful message for your peers. You wrote exactly from the veiw point of your youth. Stand up for your convictions, and this can lead to your family to Christ Jesus too. You did a very good job of getting your main point across, for parents and kids alike. There are alot of people here that can help you improve the writing skills as you grow in faith. Keep up the writing! God bless ya, littlelight