The Official Writing Challenge
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A very personal, touching story. Thank you for sharing...it needs a lot of punctuation help, especially with commas and apostrophes. Toward the end you use "God's" several times but only once use the apostrophe. I'd suggest at the beginning, you let the reader hear the conversations between your father and his siblings, then tell us what's going on. Overall, a good effort. Keep writing!
11/29/14
Your entry was so touching and intensely personal and it tugged at my heart.

So many truths in this poignant piece. Your sentence saying, my security blanket now covered by a sheet was prolific and made my eyes tear up.

Moving, stirring and powerfully good.

Thank you for sharing your words and a piece of your "coming of age."

God bless~
11/29/14
I enjoyed reading your coming of age story. Thanks for sharing it. God Bless.
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