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Wow this is a powerful story. You do a great job of introducing the conflict immediately and pulled me right into the room with the parents and baby.

Some tiny red ink would be to remind you of the rule to not start a sentence with a numeral. Either write it out or rearrange it like this: After 167 hours, I finally wrapped my arms around her.

You did a great job of building the suspense. I have a bad habit of not reading the titles right away. I think if I had read this one, it might have given the ending away, though it's hard for me to say for sure. I do think you handled the topic and showed that hope can be excruciating or more incredible than anything. I often try not to hope so I won't be disappointed but I'm learning that it is better to hope because, either way God is right there beside me every step of the way. Your story really shows this.
A compelling story with great description and emotion. I was with you throughout. Lovely
Lovely and heartwarming.