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Okay and where are we going? “Into the promised land”, he said quite confidently.
Where is it located?
“In the promises, you’ll see it when you get there.”
Why should I believe you?
"Because I’m not like man. I cannot lie. “Furthermore, it’s because I said so.”
“I promise, I will never leave you or forsake you. I will make the darkness light before you. Whatever is wrong I’ll make it right and all the high places I’ll bring them down?” Isaiah 42:16
“You can trust me, its goanna be just like I said; you’ll see. Just walk with me.”
“Have you read the handbook?
What handbook, may I ask?
“I believe you call it the Holy Bible” he replied.
Oh! Yes I’ve read that book quite a few times.
“Then, why do you ask so many questions, as though you don’t believe anything I said.”
Well, you see I have my struggles, especially when I’m asked to trust others. The last time I trusted someone I ended up in a whole lot of problems. I’m not sure I want to go through that again. You seem to be a nice person but, I really don’t know if I can trust you.
Who are you anyway? First, you said let’s take a walk, but you had no idea where we were going. (At least so it seemed to me.) Next when I asked about the place you said something about “when we get there”. I don’t like surprises. Yet, your confidence and boldness says you know something I don’t. Your words seem to echo deep down inside of me.
Can you tell me how long it’s going to be, before we get there? This appears to be a very long journey and I’m already tired.
“It all depends on you. There are lessons you must learn, and I want us to be friends—spending time together.”
“This walk can indeed be a very long one--several miles, through valleys, up the mountains, in the rain, through sickness and pain. But, it’s only a walk, and all you’ve got to do, is take one step at a time.”
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It was a bit hard to follow because of the quotation marks weren't used consistently. Each time someone different speaks, you should start a new paragraph. Also adding some lines like this: My shoulders slumped as I shuffled along. "Are we there yet?" would not only show the reader who is speaking but also would show the MC's personality and emotions.
I chuckled at the line about being there yet. It reminds me of a child anxious to get to their destination. And that's really what we are as Christians--God's children eager to reach our destination. I thought it was quite a clever way of showing that message. The technical things you can work on with a critique group or challenge buddy but the heart of the message is clearly God using you to touch people in ways you may never know. That's what is truly important--doing God's calling. Thank you for sharing this delightful story.