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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Holiday (04/05/12)
A Christmas Miracle
When you think of a Christmas story told by your grandmother, depending on how old you are you could be talking a bout alot of years or not so many. In my case it's not so many because my grandmother is not real old nor did this story happen very long ago.
Back in l993, a year her famiy would like to have forgotten turned out to be a bleak year from the start. So many things had happened that it just did not seem to stop.
There were many sicknesses and surgeries that had happened along with her mother's sickess and passsing on May 8th of that year. There were more major surgeries and then the worst thing tht could of happened did. Grandma's and Grandpa's son passed away on July 9th. That could have been made even worse if they had not known the Lord and the assurance and peace of mind that surpasses all understanding only He acaould give.
I came along on Septemaber 26th of that year a true blessing they said. Although I had to stay in the hospital for 10 days, Grandma and Grandpa were there every day. My grandpa had to go through another surgery in November on his gall bladder that could not wait.
Grandma and Grandpa along with my mom during this time had a lot of things to get through and knowing that their son was with the Lord helped them cope.
I am now getting to the real Christmas story, it happened while we were sitting in the West Mansfield Friends Chruch on Christma day, she so missed her son, but also her mom as well. She longed to see them both that Christmas. They were getting ready to sing Silent Night. As they were standing to sing grandma said a wonderful feeling came over her and she heard her mother and son singing this song too. It was as if they were right there, as a choir in a distance sang to. She heard her mother's singing voice many times and her son's. It was so overwhelming that she just stopped and listened. The gift she received that day was so special that she still can't hear the song without choking up and yet smiling at the same time, for the wonderful memory that it gives her. It was a true Christmas Blessing to her.
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Laura Manley
04/12/12
It sounds like you have a really wonder Grandma who has a huge capacity to love. I had a little trouble in reading your story for two reasons. Number one, you did not separate the story in paragraphs (double spaced) and secondly, I did not see any punctuation. As you continue to write, I would also like to see more action in it versus telling of the story. Describe more in detail about what they were wearing, saying, giving me more visuals than telling me the story. I thought your story was very nice in that it showed your family's dynamics and how much love there is in your story. Keep writing!
Carol Alwood
04/13/12
The end gave me chills! I have no doubt she really heard them. I know God can reveal whatever He wants to us. What a blessing. Thank you for sharing this.
Carol
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
04/13/12
This is a beautiful story. It brought tears to my eyes. 1993 was a rough year for me too. My mom and grandmother, both died within days of each other. I also gave birth to my youngest child at the end of December so I can really empathize with the feelings that Grandma went through. You did a nice job of showing how part of her may have wanted to cancel Christmas but another part that flowed with peace knowing her loved ones were with Jesus.

You had some tiny errors, that a good proofreader would help you catch like about is one word and a lot is two. Also make short paragraphs and double space them to give the reader that all important white space. (You may want to look on the message boards for a critique group or a challenge buddy)

You did a nice job of writing about the topic while still delivering a powerful message. you didn't come off as preachy either but genuine. All in all this was a sweet story that really touched my heart.

C D Swanson 
04/14/12
Thank you for this beautiful story. I too believe she heard them singing...God can reveal many things at all times, but especially to those who "need" something extra for peace and comfort.
Praise God.

Loved this. God Bless~
Lillian Rhoades 
04/15/12
A beautiful story! It's obvious that your punctuation skills need to be developed. I suggest you join a Buddy group here at Faithwriter's to critique your work prior to submission.

Loved the title!